For more information about this project, check out the earlier posts in the category “Sense and Sensibility and Placage.” Well, here we are at what I *think* is the mid-point of the story. Claude’s initial draft got tangled up in its own feet about what Marianne thinks E&E will select in the way of books (correct sentiment, but pronoun trouble), and drifted back into the source novel backstory of Edward having a prior connection with Lucie, in spite of the outline suggesting otherwise. The redraft was to fix these issues. Once I told Claude what I thought was Edward’s issue with declaring himself to Eleonore, Claude did a solid job. But of course the LLMs are all professional championship grade wafflers, and poor Edward is only an amateur at the sport. On an unrelated note, I like the dog on the flatboat.

A Growing Attachment

For more information about this project, check out the earlier posts in the category “Sense and Sensibility and Placage.” Claude’s first draft is largely what you see here; I only had it rework the part where Alejandro is genuinely pleased about something. For my part, I dropped the very last sentence of the scene (too much in the style of some of Claude’s other outros), and trimmed the initial description of the room in the house on Rue Royale.

A Blooming Romance

For more information about this project, check out the earlier posts in the category “Sense and Sensibility and Placage.” This took several drafts, mostly to clarify a somewhat muddled conversation about whether Mrs. Jennings’ gatherings were orderly or not, and delete named references to a couple of characters who are still a little bit before their formal introduction. And also, get Claude to quote Cowper directly. In terms of interesting Claude innovations, the idea of the Willoughby analogue kind of winding Marianne up and watching her go was new to me. It’s not entirely in line with the source novel, where he tends to parrot her literary opinions, but I decided I liked it here, and left it in. I reworded the overly vague last line slightly and reworked Edward’s thoughts about his father to be somewhat differently expressed than the last time the subject came up.

A Literary Conversation

For more information about this project, check out the earlier posts in the category “Sense and Sensibility and Placage.” This was a difficult scene because in the original outline, this was Edward’s introduction, and I decided I wanted him in much, much earlier, as in the source novel. Claude also randomly dropped a woman into the party who I decided was going to be important later, so between that and the emdashes and Robert randomly materializing at Mrs. Jennings’s party, and some other issues, the drafts added up. What you see below is like draft four or five.

Edward and Robert