Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Notes

I used a different prompting framework for this fanfic than I did for Sense and Sensibility and Placage. Around the time I started work on this, the Future Fiction Academy open-sourced a set of AI constraints they called the Narrative Physics Engine. (At this link, search for “worksheet” and then for “section_18”. Those are the important parts.) If you’re looking at the stuff at the link and thinking “gee all that seems like overkill just to scratch a fanfic itch,” that’s also more or less what Claude said when I copy-pasted all that stuff in.

We worked together on this set of constraints to build three sets of markdowns. One to use when brainstorming original fiction, to build a source document Claude could refer back to when I fed it bits of WIP for dictation cleanup, etc. One to use at the start of the revision process, to help Claude understand the finished first draft. A third and shorter one for fanfic, which I used for this fanfic. Claude built a usable outline for The Rector’s Other Business in short order, and drafted the whole thing across a handful of sessions. I was not wild about the style Claude used for this, even with an initial discussion about Collins’s voice, and a reference to the film which had initially given me this story idea (Night Creatures, Hammer’s version of Dr. Syn with the serial numbers filed off). If you’ve ever read parodies of Rudyard Kipling by the generation or two of authors immediately after him, Claude sounded kind of like that in this story, with a lot of pseudo-profound, pseudo-snarky tautologies. Because this was a shorter and lighter fanfic than Sense and Sensibility and Placage, I edited it much more heavily at a sentence level. You will note that Claude made very free with the em-dashes for Mr. Collins’s rambling speeches “in character” as the pompous clergyman he is pretending to be. I left them alone because this was a situation where they actually worked and were even period appropriate.

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 17

The weeks that followed had the quality of an aftermath. It was a period in which the important things had happened and the world was in the process of catching up with them.

April moved toward May and the spring advanced with it. The hedgerows filled in and the fields greened and the light stayed longer each evening. Hunsford returned to its routines with the relief of a place that has weathered something difficult and come through intact. The Sunday congregations were perhaps slightly larger than they had been. Whether this represented renewed piety or a clearer understanding of what their rector was capable of I could not say and did not ask. The runs continued. There were two before the end of April, both clean and unremarkable. The Gofton roof continued to hold. Pyke maintained the churchyard with his customary attention and said nothing about anything.

Darcy and Elizabeth came to an understanding, and informed Lady Catherine while she was still chastened by the fall of Gerard Annesley. I do not think that Darcy reminded her that he and his betrothed knew about his aunt’s dependence on the free-traders. He would not have needed to.

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 16

Smugglers’ business alert!

We did it on a Thursday, three days after the abduction of Elizabeth Bennet.

Three days was the right interval: long enough for Darcy’s anger to cool somewhat, long enough for me to have the conversations that needed to be had with Lady Catherine and with the Annesley family’s representative. This was a cousin from Maidstone who arrived on Tuesday. The conversation with him was brief and entirely civil, and it arrived at the conclusion I had intended it to arrive at before he sat down. He left on Wednesday looking no more cheerful than he had arrived, but considerably more clear about what the available options were.

Lady Catherine I dealt with in person, on Wednesday afternoon, in the east garden at Rosings where the topiary provided sufficient privacy and the distance from the house was sufficient to ensure we were not overheard. I told her the minimum necessary and watched her face do the things it did when she was receiving information she found deeply inconvenient. She asked two questions, both precise. I answered them. She was silent for a moment, looking at the topiary.

“The Maidstone cousin,” she said at last.

“Has been spoken to. He understands the situation.”

“And the…resolution,” she said, in the tone she used for things she was not going to name directly.

“Thursday. It will be done cleanly.”

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 15

As we rode, I thought about what was coming. Darcy had just discovered that his aunt was a client of a smuggling operation run by her own clergyman. He had ridden out with said clergyman and a collection of masked men to rescue the woman he was in love with, and he had agreed to discuss none of this until after. “After” had arrived. The agreement was about to expire and I had perhaps twenty minutes on the road to determine how I was going to handle the expiration.

This was not going to be easy. Darcy had seen too much. He could not be threatened and could not be bought. He was Lady Catherine’s nephew, which meant he had a family claim on the situation that I could not dismiss. He was also a man whose fundamental instinct was toward the correct thing, which was both his best quality and his most dangerous one, because the correct thing from where he was standing might very well be the magistrate.

Against this: he had covered his face when asked. He had kept his end of the bargain on the road. He had hit Annesley with the efficiency of a man who had made a decision and executed it cleanly. These were the actions of a man who valued some things more deeply than law and order. Whether I could work with it was the question I had not yet answered when we came through the Hunsford gate.

The ride back had been slower than the ride out, the cart setting the pace. The morning had advanced toward midday, the April sun climbing and taking some of the chill from the air. Annesley lay silent under the blanket in the cart bed. Pyke and I rode ahead. Behind us, Elizabeth drove with competence, and Darcy rode beside her. The village lane was quiet as we came through, the few people who saw us having the good sense to find business elsewhere. Charlotte was at the door before we had fully stopped.

She looked at Elizabeth first and seemed relieved. She came forward and took Elizabeth’s arm with quiet efficiency. The hall behind her was dim after the brightness outside, the morning light from the window doing little against the dark paneling. Maria stood near the stairs with an expression of wide-eyed alarm.

“Come inside,” Charlotte said, to Elizabeth, and then to Maria: “Put the kettle on, if you please.”

Maria went. Charlotte steered Elizabeth toward the sitting room. Elizabeth went, which told me she was more shaken than she was showing, because Elizabeth did not generally allow herself to be steered.

Halfway down the hall, she stopped and looked back at Darcy, who had followed us in and was standing near the door, unwinding his scarf from about his face. It seemed important to her that she watch him unmask, and Charlotte did not try to hurry her along.

“Thank you,” she said. Her voice was quieter and more direct than when she had thanked him for untying her.

Darcy said nothing. He gave a brief, tight nod, the nod of a man who does not trust himself to say more than that at present.

Elizabeth went into the sitting room. Charlotte, a step behind her, caught my eye over Elizabeth’s head with an expression that said: “I will find out what she thinks and I will tell you when the time is right.”

Then she was gone too, and the hall was quiet, and it was just Darcy and myself. We went into the study.

The study was warmer than the hall, a fire burning in the grate that someone had laid while we were gone. The room held the ordinary disorder of a morning interrupted: correspondence still on the desk where I had left it when Pyke arrived with his news.

He did not sit when I gestured to the chair. He stood in the middle of the study and looked at me with the expression of a man who has been patient long enough.

“The magistrate,” he said. It was not a question.

“Yes. I expected that would be your position.” I sat down, because sitting down when the other man is standing is a choice that costs nothing and communicates something useful. “Sit down, Mr. Darcy.”

This time, after a moment, he did.

“You are running a smuggling operation, out of a living provided by my aunt, with the apparent knowledge and cooperation of my aunt, and a man connected to my aunt’s late husband’s family has used it to abduct a gentlewoman of my acquaintance.” He said it with the flat precision of a man who had been organizing his thoughts on the road. “You will understand that I find this difficult to leave with the parties involved.”

“I understand it entirely. I would find it the same way in your position.” I looked at him steadily. “I am asking you to leave it with me regardless.”

“On what grounds?”

“On the grounds that what happened this morning was not the operation. It was one man acting outside his authority, against my explicit instructions, for reasons that had nothing to do with the operation’s purpose and everything to do with his own judgment, which has been deteriorating for the past two months. He will be dealt with. I give you my word on that.”

“Your word?” Darcy asked sceptically.

“My word,” I said, unoffended. “You may rate its value as you see fit. I would suggest that a man who has stood between you and a knife in the back has some claim to being taken at his word, but I recognize that this is not a conventional basis for trust.”

Darcy was silent for a moment. “Now that I know more of you, you do not seem to me to be either a stupid man, or a dishonorable one. Why are you so determined to protect this criminal enterprise?”

“For the sake of the parish,” I said. I told him of the seven families. The eight beyond them. The Goftons, four children, the youngest not yet two when I arrived, the roof that had held this winter because there was money to repair it. The three years of runs without serious incident, without violence, without anyone killed or imprisoned. The nature of life in Hunsford parish now, compared to the nature of life in Hunsford parish before, which any man who cared to enquire could verify for himself.

Darcy listened. From what he had said of Pemberley during various dinners at Rosings, I think he understood the obligations of the gentry towards those less fortunate better than, say, Lady Catherine did.

“And what of my aunt?” he asked.

“Your aunt has received certain goods from the Continent that the legitimate market could not provide to her satisfaction. She has done so with the care of a woman who understands that there are things it is better not to formally acknowledge.” I met his eyes. “She did not know what Annesley did this morning. She will not be pleased when she finds out.”

Darcy looked unhappy. He had respected his aunt, and perhaps loved her. I think he would have preferred not to know these things about her. Then a new and terrible thought seemed to occur to him. “She introduced him to you,” he said.

“She did. Under family obligation, I believe, rather than genuine enthusiasm. She has been finding him…trying, of late. It was not her fault. The responsibility for what he did this morning is mine. I did not move against him quickly enough.”

Darcy looked at me for a long moment. He was grappling with all that he had learned, which was what I had hoped for and had not been certain of.

“You said Annesley will be dealt with,” he said. “How?”

“In the way these things are dealt with, among the free-traders. Without the magistrate. Without bloodshed.”

“I have only your word for that as well.”

“I have nothing else to offer you at present. The alternative is the magistrate, who will inconvenience a great many people who have done nothing to deserve it. He will almost certainly take no action against Annesley, given the difficulty of getting witnesses to testify and the family connections involved, but he will destroy something that has taken three years to build and that matters to people who have very little else that matters to them.”

I looked at him.

“I am not asking you to approve of what I do, Mr. Darcy. I am asking you to consider the consequences of the alternative before you decide.”

The silence that followed was longer than the previous ones.

The door opened, and Elizabeth came in.

Her hair was put up and she was composed in the way that Charlotte is composed: not the absence of feeling but the complete management of it.

“Charlotte tells me,” she said, “that you are probably discussing whether to go to the magistrate.”

“Charlotte is correct as usual,” I said.

She looked at Darcy. Darcy looked at her in a way which spoke volumes.

“Don’t,” she said.

“Miss Bennet…” Darcy began.

“I have met the Gofton family,” Elizabeth said. “And Charlotte mentioned them again just now, when she explained what would happen if you went to the magistrate.”

Darcy said nothing.

“You have been wronged this morning,” Elizabeth said. “You were almost stabbed in the back. I have been wronged this morning, rather more directly, by being kidnapped. I must tell you that going to the magistrate is not the remedy I want.”

“The man who took you,” Darcy said, with careful precision, “is currently in this building.”

“I am aware of that. But Charlotte believes that Mr. Collins will deal with him as he deserves, and I find that I am inclined to believe her.”

Darcy looked at Elizabeth for a long moment, and then he looked at me. Outside the study window the April morning had become the April afternoon, the light shifting in the way it does in Kent in the spring, clear and not quite warm.

“I will not go to the magistrate,” Darcy said. “On the condition that I may witness Annesley’s fate.”

“Agreed,” I said.

He stood up and produced a letter from his coat.

“Miss Bennet, I wrote this with the idea of giving it to you this morning. Our conversations since then have rather overtaken it, and now I find it…ungraciously expressed. Do you have any objection if I burn it here unread?”

“If our host has no objection, then I have none,” Elizabeth answered.

“Please, burn what you like here, within reason,” I told him pleasantly.

He tossed it onto the fire. I glimpsed only a few words before the letter was destroyed: “Be not alarmed, madam…”

“I will call tomorrow,” he said, to the room generally, and went out.

Elizabeth and I stood in the study for a moment after the door had closed.

“Charlotte,” she said, “told me rather more than the minimum, I think.”

“She was correct to do so,” I said.

She nodded. “You may find it difficult to believe that I am in need of fresh air and exercise after this morning, Mr. Collins, but nonetheless, I feel the need of a walk to clear my thoughts.”

“Certainly,” I said.

We left the study together and found Charlotte in the hall. Elizabeth said a few words to her, and then went out again.

“Is the magistrate coming?” Charlotte asked. She spoke lightly, but there was the same worry I had seen in her face when she asked if I expected a certain invitation from my wife on her first night at the parsonage.

“You convinced Elizabeth that it would be unwise, and she convinced Darcy,” I said. “Thank you.”

Charlotte put her hand on my cheek, which startled me almost as much as if she had drawn a knife, but it was a pleasanter kind of startlement. “Elizabeth tells me you that you cut quite a figure this morning. I would have liked to have seen Annesley with your blade at his throat.”

“I’m sure you would have been quite entertained by this morning’s work. Perhaps I should have asked you to come along, to bear Elizabeth company on the road back.”

Charlotte smiled. “It seems Darcy bore her company, with good results.”

“Indeed.”

Her hand dropped to my chest. “I think tonight would be a good time for you to come to my room,” she said. “After…everything else. I know you still have much to do.”

“I would be honored,” I told her firmly. She left me then, and I went in search of Pyke. As Charlotte had said, I still had much to do.

Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 14

Smugglers’ business alert!

Elizabeth walked every morning. She was a woman of regular habits, whose energy required an outlet. She was out by seven most days, sometimes earlier, taking the paths around the park that Rosings bounded on its eastern side. She had been doing this since her first week in Kent.

I had thought, after the evening of Darcy’s proposal, that she might vary it. That the morning after might find her disinclined to walk the paths that ran near Rosings, near the possibility of encountering Darcy, near anything that required her to be composed before she had finished being angry. I had underestimated her. She was out at half past six the following morning, which I knew because I was in the study at half past six and heard the door.

The eastern path she favored ran along the boundary of Rosings Park, a distance of perhaps two miles from the parsonage gate to where it met the Elham road. For the first quarter mile it followed the lane in clear view of the village, but beyond that it entered the woods that bounded the park on that side. The path was well-maintained, Lady Catherine having strong opinions about the condition of her boundaries, but it ran through dense enough cover that a walker would be out of sight of both the village and Rosings itself for the better part of an hour. I had noted this during my first survey of the area. It was the kind of detail a man in my position notices.

What I did not know, and did not find out until it was already over, was that Annesley had learned of this habit of hers.

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 13

Elizabeth had cried off the Rosings dinner that evening with a headache, which I accepted at face value and Charlotte accepted with the expression of a woman who has her own opinion about the headache. Maria stayed at the parsonage to keep her company, which left Charlotte and myself to make their excuses to Lady Catherine.

Lady Catherine received the news as a minor personal affront, expressed her hope that Miss Bennet would be recovered sufficiently to attend on Thursday, and led us into dinner. Annesley was not in attendance.

After dinner, we played speculation. Lady Catherine played with the focused intensity she brought to everything, Colonel Fitzwilliam played with the ease of a man who is good at cards and not ashamed to show it, and I played with the cheerful incompetence of Mr. Collins, which required about a tenth of my attention and left the remainder free to observe that Darcy was not at the table.

He had been present at dinner and had excused himself afterward with something murmured about correspondence, which Lady Catherine had received with the slight compression of her lips that indicated she did not believe it and considered it beneath her dignity to say so. Fitzwilliam had watched him go with a smile of quiet amusement.

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 12

The connection between Elizabeth and Darcy had begun, as best I could reconstruct, within the first few days of Darcy’s arrival. Probably it had started with all the small interactions that Rosings produced between people staying in the same neighborhood who were expected to call on each other with regularity. I had not been present for all of these, but Charlotte had seen enough of the two in company to have an opinion.

She told me what she thought on a Sunday evening after church. Elizabeth had gone for a walk toward the village in the last of the daylight, watched from a respectful distance by the eldest Gofton boy, who would go running to fetch help at the first sign of trouble. Maria had gone to bed early with a headache. Charlotte and I were alone in the sitting room with the fire, comfortably silent.

The fire had been built up against the evening cold, the room warm enough to be comfortable but not so warm as to waste fuel. Charlotte sat in the chair nearest the better light, her sewing in her lap, the needle moving with the steady rhythm of long practice. I had taken the chair across from her with the correspondence I was reading. The windows showed only darkness now, the garden invisible beyond them. It was the kind of evening that invited confidences, the kind of domestic quiet we had arrived at without planning for it.

Charlotte set down her sewing and said, without preamble: “I think Darcy is in love with Elizabeth.”

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 11

Smugglers’ business alert!

Darcy arrived at Rosings with Colonel Fitzwilliam. Fitzwilliam I had encountered once before, briefly, during one of his previous Easter visits to his aunt. He was a pleasant, sociable man with a soldier’s habit of reading terrain, which in his case extended to social terrain.

Darcy’s past visits to Lady Catherine had been very brief, and had occurred at moments in Eastertide when I was too busy to visit Rosings, either due to the free-trade or to parish work. I had met him in Hertfordshire at the Netherfield ball, where I had introduced myself with the full enthusiasm of Mr. Collins paying his respects to the nephew of his patroness.

Darcy had been gracious, after his fashion, but he had received my overtures with the expression of a man being rained on, who has decided that complaining of the rain will only make things worse. We had exchanged perhaps four sentences. He had removed himself from the conversation at the earliest opportunity, and Elizabeth had reproved me for encroaching upon him. It had been the one moment which made me wonder if she disliked him as much as the gossips of Hertfordshire claimed.

The dinner at which things shifted was a Thursday evening, perhaps ten days into Darcy’s stay at Rosings.

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 10

The Lucas carriage came through the Hunsford gate at half past three on a Wednesday afternoon. I was at the door. We had a small audience of curious parishioners at a respectful distance, as there always is when anything of note arrives in a village lane. I composed my features into the expression of a man receiving distinguished guests and sensible of the honor.

Sir William descended first, with his usual expansive energy and shook my hand. He looked over the parsonage and its church, at the lane and the village and the general disposition of things, then to the coast beyond it. He had the eye of a man who had spent twenty years knowing which harbors ran the most goods.

“My dear Mr. Collins,” he said. “A most charming establishment. Most charming entirely. Charlotte’s letters have conveyed a very favorable impression, and I see that the reality is even beyond her account of the place.”

“You are most welcome, Sir William,” I said, with the warmth of a man deeply sensible of the honor. “Most welcome. The parish has been looking forward — that is, Charlotte has spoken so often of the pleasure of —”

“Yes,” said Sir William, and we smiled at each other with great mutual appreciation and said nothing of any significance, which was, I thought, precisely what both of us intended.

Maria came out of the carriage next, pink-cheeked and slightly crumpled from the journey, regarding the Kent landscape with the wide-eyed enthusiasm of a young woman for whom everything beyond Hertfordshire constitutes foreign travel.

Elizabeth descended last, straightening her coat and looking about her with the alert, assessing quality I remembered from Hertfordshire. The journey had not diminished it. She took in the parsonage, the church, the lane, with that brief comprehensive attention, and then looked at me with an expression that was pleasant and gave nothing away.

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Fanficcing with Claude: The Rector’s Other Business, Chapter 9

Lady Catherine de Bourgh received us the following evening, in the great drawing room at Rosings. She did so, as she did most things, with the air of a woman conferring a distinction upon the unworthy. The room was designed for this effect. It had high ceilings, portraits of ancestors chosen to suggest that consequence was hereditary and abundant, and furniture of a quality that announced its own expense without apology.

I had dined here perhaps forty times and had never quite lost the awareness that the room was doing something to the people in it, pressing down on them in a way that required either submission or a very firm internal posture to resist. I submitted, visibly and with enthusiasm. This was my established practice and I saw no reason to vary it.

“Mrs. Collins,” said Lady Catherine, studying Charlotte with the eye of a woman accustomed to finding everything around her in need of improvement. “I trust the journey from Hertfordshire was not too arduous. The roads in that part of the country are, I believe, indifferent.”

“Quite comfortable, thank you, your ladyship,” said Charlotte, as unruffled as always. I admired the shape of her social mask, so much subtler than my own, and in some ways less arduous to maintain.

Lady Catherine received Charlotte’s response with the slight pause of a woman who had expected either effusion or discomfort and had encountered neither. She frowned slightly at Charlotte.

“You are Sir William Lucas’s daughter,” she said.

“I am, your ladyship.”

“He was in trade.”

“He was, your ladyship. Import, principally.” Charlotte’s tone was level, the tone of a woman stating facts. “He has been retired from it these many years.”

“Hm,” said Lady Catherine, which was not the worst thing I had heard her say to a young woman. She turned to me. “Mr. Collins, I trust the parish has not suffered in your absence.”

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