Fanficcing with Claude: Sense and Sensibility and Placage, Scene 5

For more information about this project, check out the earlier posts in the category “Sense and Sensibility and Placage.” Claude did very well on its first draft. For the redraft, I asked it to rework an incoherent description of what the Dashwoods’ mother was doing with her hands during the cart ride, and have Marianne show more emotion. My instinct is that free women of color in this time and place would not have survived long, if they showed the overwrought behavior that Marianne and her mother do in the Austen novel. But Marianne isn’t Marianne if she isn’t the most emo person in any given room. Then I realized this was the right time to introduce Edward, and that led to two more drafts. I manually removed an em-dash rather than ask for another draft.

Journey to Faubourg Marigny

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Fanficcing with Claude: Sense and Sensibility and Placage, Scene 4

For the origins of this project, see previous posts in “Sense and Sensibility and Placage” category. Claude’s first draft was fairly satisfactory on this one, and draft two was me asking for em-dash removal and sentence level fixes in a few places where the AI’s lack of logic became obvious. The words “with her [Frances’s] advice” are mine. I didn’t like what Claude had there but couldn’t justify mucking around with a third draft for it.

Planning the Departure

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Fanficcing with Claude: Sense and Sensibility and Placage, Scene 3

For more information about this project, please see past posts under the “Sense and Sensibility and Placage” category. Claude, amazingly, got through draft 1 with no em-dashes! I asked for a rephrase of one sentence that felt anachronistic to me, and to break down a loooong sentence that ended this scene in draft 1. Otherwise draft 2, which you see here, is much what draft 1 was. I did realize at the last minute that this needed to come before the first Marianne POV, even though the latter was written first, and adjusted the scheduling accordingly. I haven’t had much reason to quarrel with these early setup scenes, but we will see how Claude does once the romance arcs start.

Letter from Mrs. Jennings

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Fanficcing with Claude: Sense and Sensibility and Placage, Scene 2

For more information on this fanfic project and why I outsourced the drafting of it to Claude, see the previous post in the “Sense and Sensibility and Placage” category. Claude completed this scene in five and a fraction drafts. It started out with a confused approach to the will, which draft two corrected after I set it on the right path. It also had John Dashwood offering a cottage (supposed to be the property of Mrs. Jennings) to his half-sisters. I got it to correct that and the em-dashes in draft three. The last fractional draft was to address a particular bit where John Dashwood talks around how much money he’s going to give his stepmother/half-sisters per annum. I sympathized with Claude’s desire not to specify an amount in currency, but I thought there was a better way of not committing ourselves, and asked for a redraft. Then I realized that Celeste Dashwood, the heroines’ mother really needed to be present and at least somewhat active for this scene. And then I caught a couple of other minor things I wanted to correct, so then came draft five. Eleonore’s last line in the scene is my rewording of Claude, and minor edits by me were also made for continuity with later scenes.

The Promise and Its Breaking

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Fanficcing with Claude: Sense and Sensibility and Placage, Scene 1

Up til now, the only writing projects I have let Claude draft are fanfics that I wanted to read but don’t care enough to write myself. This one is a retelling of S&S set in New Orleans in 1813-1814 with the female leads as placées. In this case, I did so partly because I felt uncomfortable with trying to recreate the often downbeat tone of the source novel. Another reason I undertook this was to get a better feel for Claude’s project feature. I will probably do a process post either at the end of this experiment or maybe the midway point. Below the cut is Claude’s third draft of the first. Its first draft elided any discussion of the heroines’ ethnicity and social status, which is pretty important to this retelling. After I had it fix that, I told it to eliminate the em-dashes (which it tried to argue with me about) and rework a labored metaphor about Henry Dashwood’s illness. The result is below the cut.

The Death of Henry Dashwood

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Ranking Georgette Heyer’s Period Pieces: The Introduction

First of all, I don’t care a groat for the idiots claiming that because they can’t track down the sources she was using, she was some kind of liar or fabulist. Her biographers state that she relied heavily on memoirs and collected letters which she found in private libraries that could well have been dispersed to the four winds in the fifty to eighty years since Heyer did her homework. Her research files seem to have been destroyed or dispersed after her own death and the suicide of her husband, which doesn’t help matters either. Both the biographers and the detractors seem to be ignorant of the actual fiction writers of the period, beyond Jane Austen. Heyer, on the other hand, shows signs of knowing them well. Lona Manning’s extensive reading in the period has brought to light a couple of writers whose tropes might have influenced Heyer, and at least a couple more who were not much as story-tellers but offered a wealth of detail about the culture of their time.  

It is however reasonable to say that Heyer, like her successors, filtered what she learned about the Georgian and Regency eras through her own culture and beliefs. In that sense, she is about as much of a fabulist as her modern detractors are, because (at least in her more escapist books) she is not much interested in history as history, only as a platform for what interests her, which is also how her detractors approach the period. Her comedic banter uses Regency cant mixed with a style and cadence similar to the more flippant moments of Dorothy Sayers and Margery Allingham, and whether you like the style of characterization used by those two mystery authors is probably a better indicator of whether you will like Heyer than whether you like, say, Julia Quinn.

Over the next few posts, I will be ranking the Heyer Historicals as “low-rotation,” “medium-rotation,” and “high-rotation,” based on how often I get the urge to read them. If it’s not mentioned, either assume I haven’t read it at all (The Great Roxhythe, The Spanish BrideAn Infamous Army) or haven’t read it recently enough to have an opinion (her medieval novels, The Black MothThe Convenient Marriage, The Devil’s CubPowder and Patch). I had a publication list in front of me when I wrote these posts originally, so you may see a vague tendency towards chronological order of release for the individual entries, especially in the “low rotation” entries. Listing order within a post is otherwise random, and does not reflect anything about the relative merits of any given pair of novels mentioned in the same post.

State of the Author, 4Q2025

It’s been roughly three months since the last State of the Author, so here’s where I’m at:

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Midjourney Monday: The Longbourn Ballroom

Longbourn’s ballroom was the site of most of the asteroid’s streaming videos, and Mrs. Bennet had insisted on giving it a more regular shape than most of Longbourne’s interior spaces. The space was an immense rectangle with gleaming white marble floors and columns that reflected the purple and gold lights. The far wall was decorated with a pattern of hexagonal screens set in gold frames, which continued across the ceiling. The main video feeds played out on the screens on the far wall, the more minor ones being relegated to a merely decorative role on the ceiling.